better now that characters are not looking at the camera. the story is a bit abrupt here, especially in the first page. the orange close-up implies that the food request is granted, but then the fight starts... this is confusing. try a new draft that starts the story from the beginning. use comic conventions, like moving from establishing shots of characters/settings, into close-ups, reaction shots, and two-shots (characters together interacting).
I like how you use a variety of different photos. Some are close ups of the expressions and others cut off body parts. Try coming up with deeper story lines to emphasize, where you better establish each character and their role.
I really like the idea of this project. Maybe you could come up with ones that are fuller and have more to them. You could even try editing pictures, to create a powerful flow within your series. Good job so far!
its very funny!!! and also it is very creative! i like your idea, you use several different pictures and put that in one story!!! It is very interesting style of works i ever seen!!! nice job!!!
im glad to see the story continues! these are very interesting i like the direction they all take and one can tell you have spent time thinking about the stories and pictures a lot
Good photos. Maybe try making a longer comic with a longer story. It might make it more interesting, but good work!
ReplyDeletebetter now that characters are not looking at the camera. the story is a bit abrupt here, especially in the first page. the orange close-up implies that the food request is granted, but then the fight starts... this is confusing. try a new draft that starts the story from the beginning. use comic conventions, like moving from establishing shots of characters/settings, into close-ups, reaction shots, and two-shots (characters together interacting).
ReplyDeleteStrange photos but interesting, I like how you combined many different photos to tell a story.
ReplyDeleteI like how you use a variety of different photos. Some are close ups of the expressions and others cut off body parts. Try coming up with deeper story lines to emphasize, where you better establish each character and their role.
ReplyDeleteI really like the idea of this project. Maybe you could come up with ones that are fuller and have more to them. You could even try editing pictures, to create a powerful flow within your series. Good job so far!
ReplyDeleteits very funny!!! and also it is very creative! i like your idea, you use several different pictures and put that in one story!!! It is very interesting style of works i ever seen!!! nice job!!!
ReplyDeleteim glad to see the story continues! these are very interesting i like the direction they all take and one can tell you have spent time thinking about the stories and pictures a lot
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